Editing: Second focus group for my teaser trailer

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Now, I have re-filmed the scenes that I want and put them all together with all the different sounds that I have created and recorded. Below, I have filmed my media class again giving me feedback on what they liked and what they thought was good about, also their constructive criticism on where to go next.


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The first comment was that 'Unknown' is apparently already a film name, however my film is not using the same ideas as this film, as well as this it is clear in previous research and planning posts that the name and ideas for my film were not influenced by this film at all and because of this I am choosing to stick with the name that I already have, and you can hear my media teacher saying that it is not a problem to have the same name because of those reasons and also because many films around the world have either the same or similar names, and also because it's not iconic, I will also talk about this in my evaluation.
Secondly, it was picked up on that Carl's dialogue is not very clear, however before I'd done this focus group I had noticed that Carl's dialogue also sounds staged which I have mentioned previously and I will record him saying again but several times to find a more natural and clearer one.
There was a query about the black and white filters over some of the shots, however it was only one person who was slightly thrown off by this and everyone else commented that they thought it was fine and actually really liked the effects, therefore I have considered this comment but I am choosing not to worry about it too much as it was only one viewer and they weren't sure why it was throwing them off or how to fix that.
Sam said he really liked my titles and the end and said that they looked very professional, and others agreed with him.
There was a question about the gunshot sound, and whether I wanted it to end so shortly and I had tried playing around to prolong but this always made it last too long and sound completely wrong, then again when I listened to other gunshot sounds, they also came to sudden ends because gunshots are loud and fast and over quickly, hence it being a popular choice of weapon for murder because it can kill quickly.
A compliment was that it had more narrative and depth to it compared to my last draft which I was happy to hear as that was what I had been working towards, also that it follows the conventions and readings of a teaser trailer, and that the music was a good choice for build up and creating pace alongside the different shots.